mI a legend Posted November 3, 2010 Share Posted November 3, 2010 A carry on from this thread http://community.sigames.com/showthread.php/233247-The-return-of-ferenc-puskas. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
mI a legend Posted November 3, 2010 Author Share Posted November 3, 2010 Played my first match. REAL MADRID 4 - 0 CASTILLA Joselu 7 min Higuain 47 , 54 min Benzema 68 Arbeloa sent off 45+4 Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
HorusFM Posted November 3, 2010 Share Posted November 3, 2010 Welcome to FMS, mI a legend. This could do with a little fleshing out as it is quite vague at the moment. There is no real indication as to where the Ferenc Puskas bit is. Hope to see more. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
mI a legend Posted November 3, 2010 Author Share Posted November 3, 2010 the ferenc puskas is me my manager name is ferenc puskas so im acting like im ferenc puskas(eventhough he is dead). Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
mI a legend Posted November 3, 2010 Author Share Posted November 3, 2010 this story is until i get fm2011 the official game. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
mI a legend Posted November 3, 2010 Author Share Posted November 3, 2010 Transfer news: Mahamadou Diarra transfers to porto for a fee of £2.9M. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Celtic_1967 Posted November 3, 2010 Share Posted November 3, 2010 This isn't a story as far as I can see. I'd suggest you have a look around and see what is required to be posted in FMS. Read anything by Mark Wilson if you want to see how a story that is solely fooball/match based should be laid out. Currently you don't have anything like enough detail in your posts. The sort of stories Mark writes are (without wishing to offend Mark) the minimum we would expect if you wish to post here. That said, flesh it out a bit and we'll happily read every word. Currently I couldn't even direct you to the career updates forum as they'd need more detail too. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
mI a legend Posted November 3, 2010 Author Share Posted November 3, 2010 Transfer News: Real Madrid Loan Villareal's Young Left back Joan Oriol for a loan fee of £18,000. This mark ferenc Puskas' first signing as real madrid manager. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
mI a legend Posted November 3, 2010 Author Share Posted November 3, 2010 ok ill try Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
tenthreeleader Posted November 3, 2010 Share Posted November 3, 2010 Celtic_1967 is correct on all counts. We do need to see a bit more. I went back to your original thread and had a look too -- we have house rules against pictures and we do need more than a scoreline. Otherwise I can direct you to Careers but even they would want to see a bit more. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
mI a legend Posted November 3, 2010 Author Share Posted November 3, 2010 REAL MADRID VS SAINT ANDREU Line up for real madrid. Casillas Arbeloa Carvalho Albiol Marcelo Ronaldo Ozil Khedira Sarabia Cherysev Joselu Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
mI a legend Posted November 3, 2010 Author Share Posted November 3, 2010 SAINT ANDREU GK: Morales RB: Alex CB: Moyano CB: Moya LB: Uri DM: Socias DM: Moro MR:Tarradellas ML: Marti ST: Bianco ST: Karanka My Prediction: Real Madrid 6 - 0 Saint Andreu Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
mI a legend Posted November 3, 2010 Author Share Posted November 3, 2010 SAINT ADREU 0 - 5 REAL MADRID Higuain 46,48 min Pedro Leon 50min Benzema 65,69 min Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
mI a legend Posted November 3, 2010 Author Share Posted November 3, 2010 MARCA: IT WAS A GAME OF TWO HALVES. With the first half not having much chances, out of the chances that were created real madrid had all of them through there two young strikers of Joselu and Cherysev.Joselu blasted just wide following a good run form outside the box to inside the box.Cherysev also had another good chance to give real madrid the edge but he failed to capitalise on an error from Uri with blasting his shot over the bar when he really should of scored. At the break Ferenc Puskas made a whole 11 changes to his starting line up with the likes of higuain , benzema , di maria and sergio ramos coming on. It didnt take real madrid long to score the first goal of the afternoon with shot from 6 yards out which went past morales the sant andreu goalie into the net and Higuain went off celebrating.Real Madrid didnt take long to score another through that man again Higuain with tap around the keeper after an inch perfect pass from Xabi Alonso.Real madrid made it three through there young winger Pedro Leon who showed his finishing ability when he hammered the ball home from 3 yards out.From then on real madrid controled the game and eventually made it four through a sublime 25 yard finish from there big frenchman benzema , 4 minutes late benzema scored again with an effort from outside the box which he hit home low and hard into the bottom corner.Through out the game real madrid controled the game with sant andreu only having one shot and real madrid having 20 shots shows real madrids dominance of the match.Real madrid will be hoping to keep there winning formula ahead of the new Liga BBVA season when they fly out to america to salt lake on the 31st july. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
mI a legend Posted November 3, 2010 Author Share Posted November 3, 2010 That is all foor tonight as i is off to bed please post if you think i need to do more if not waith until about about 7 for the next installment Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
mark wilson27 Posted November 4, 2010 Share Posted November 4, 2010 I'm just going to echo what the others have said really mI, Also I would put your work through a spell checker as there is quite a few mistakes. If you want any advice feel free to PM me Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
mI a legend Posted November 4, 2010 Author Share Posted November 4, 2010 Real Salt Lake vs Real Madrid Salt Lake gk:J Dombrowski rb:N.Johnson cb:R.Smith cb:J.Gutierrez lb:K.Levy rm:J.Hoyte cm :C.Dominguez cm:D.Armstrong lm.C.Parker st:C.Carr st:S.Glazer Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
mI a legend Posted November 4, 2010 Author Share Posted November 4, 2010 Real Madrid gk:I.Casillas rb:A.Arbeloa cb:R.Carvalho cb:R.Albiol lb:Marcelo rm:C.Ronaldo cm:M.Ozil cm:S.Khedira lm:P.Sarabia st:Joselu st:D.Cherysev p.s Dont know why there is a smiley face on the post before because i didnt click on the smiley face icon. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
mark wilson27 Posted November 4, 2010 Share Posted November 4, 2010 Real Madridst:D.Cherysev p.s Dont know why there is a smiley face on the post before because i didnt click on the smiley face icon. Its because there's no space between the : and D st: D.Cherysev Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
mI a legend Posted November 4, 2010 Author Share Posted November 4, 2010 Salt Lake 0 - 3 Real Madrid Joselu (8) Pablo Sarabia(38) Sergio Canales(64) Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
mI a legend Posted November 4, 2010 Author Share Posted November 4, 2010 SALT LAKE TIMES: Salt Lake Dont Rollover For Real. With people expecting real madrid to record a comfortable victory over salt lake but it was far from easy.There was no surprise when real madrid took the lead through there young promising striker joselu when he took advantage of ozil's great through ball to place it past the goalkeeper.Real madrid also had a scare when real salt lake had a corner which ended up in much of a fumble in the box,before stephen glazer took a shot but was left shocked when Pablo Sarabia cleared it off the line. Well into the second half which was much more of an even half. Salt Lake had the first key chance of the second half when Stephen Glazer headed it straight at Jerzy Dudek.Real Madrid finally got some breathing space when a pinpoint croos from ronaldo found the head of Sarabia and he finished it in style with a diving header.Real got there third through young midfielder canales after a cut back from Benzema and Canales finished with a side foot into the far corner.The match proved harder than Madrid expected but they will be happy they have came away from America with the draw. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
mark wilson27 Posted November 4, 2010 Share Posted November 4, 2010 I'm sorry MI... I can only see one post in this which resembles a story....This is a story forum EDIT: Two posts Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
mI a legend Posted November 4, 2010 Author Share Posted November 4, 2010 if people are losing intrest just tell me and ill stop the thread cause it will be a useless story if nobody is not reading it Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Elrithral Posted November 4, 2010 Share Posted November 4, 2010 Why don't you just write it and if nobody comments/nobody reads it you can take a hint. Afaic you've been advised by two mods and two of the more respected members of fms and the result was 19 lines worth of story in 12 posts. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
mI a legend Posted November 4, 2010 Author Share Posted November 4, 2010 ill just stop the story ill just stick to normal posting seen as though this story isnt going anywhere fast. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Makonnen Posted November 4, 2010 Share Posted November 4, 2010 I would recommend reading things for a while here. The write ups you made are good--if you look at the other stories here, very few of them have lineups listed for each game, and most only include the game summaries at the end of some more in depth description. If you like to write, focus on both what happens in the game, but also _why_ it happens? As Ferenc Puskas, what do you think of the squad? Who are your favorite players? Why do you use them the way you do? What are your hopes for the future of the squad? Do you like your assistant coaches? Why? Don't answer all of those at once, but look for things you can write that help bring the reader into the story, give them a reason to come back, let us know why _you're_ interested in it. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
mI a legend Posted November 4, 2010 Author Share Posted November 4, 2010 i've jsut got fm 2011 through the post anyway so i will be stoping this story anyway. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
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